User blog comment:Vorknkx/The Guide to id Software's Game Characters/@comment-3547390-20120409162520/@comment-3547390-20120413185422

I saw you did the secrets, but didn't analyze them as I was busy. Now that it is the weekend (and I should be done with a ton of junk in a couple days) I can look at this with a lot more analysis.

Secrets are a great place to start practice before taking on the entire walkthrough. You did good to make sure with the bolding, but you forgot to capitalize the links!

Also, I would recommend never saying notice something in a walkthrough. It is kinda clarified you meant to look in that direction and see the object in question without that word.

Textures are kinda iffy. The walkthroughs are written from a more player perspective than anything, so textures do not exist. Instead it is simply the wall or light (from a technical it works, but for the player itself it does not). The reason I did it was for those who aren't familiar with games (most likely to use the walkthroughs). They will read it and not understand such things as textures. By keeping it in a person perspective we avoid stuff like this and the noob can get the information they were after. If they want a more technical understanding of textures and such, that is what levels themes are for (where it is appropriate as it is more of an advanced feature for those big into the game and such instead of for the beginner who just wants to beat the game)

Never put 1 on anything, it could be easier to simply state it in the singular form (Ammo comes in boxes, so it stays plural). The only time you use it is when it is 1rst.

Another small thing - the word "the" in a sentence before a noun. While most things have it before it, any form of health does not have the word "the". Its simply because "collect the 25 health" is kinda improper compared to using "collect 25 health". It's kinda an accumulation thing more than an object (can be argued the other way I notice now however, perhaps we should change this around to add "the" to healths? As such, I didn't change this issue.)

Also, by creating stairs on HIP1M1, do you mean it like a movable wall? If so link it to it (a lot of different things are movable walls, probably one of the ones to always look out for especially on secrets). I didn't add any of them due to non assuridity, but fixed the earlier ones besides the word "the".

For a first time, you did a great job. As I said before, it is strict due to a format that has been thought out to be most convienient for the average guest. If you have any suggestions or disputes, by any means bring them up. The format was pretty much worked on by me over a length of time to achieve the best result, but there is probably more that could be done and noticed if numbers started criticizing it.